Hi, nikitakit!
First of all, thank you for working on screenplay translation! This is a great help to the project! ^__^
About the traced scene.
The source file is structured well, I was surprised to see your method of coloring black lines. That was new to me.
The first thing what I see is an almost complete absence of sharp corners.
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Try to catch the textile flow. Don't try to make whole area with a single shape. Use muiltiple of them! Connect vertices with "Link" or "Link to BLine" functions.
For example, jacket could be represented with a few regions. I drawing one of them trying to follow spline flow between sharp corners. Usually shapes between sharp corners could be represented with a smooth and simple shapes.
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After that play with width. This allows to add some depth. (Note: Generally in anime variable line width is not usual. But here we dealing with almost static image and I want try to make a little candy from it. ^_^)
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After that Im tracing other parts. On the picture below shown what I use transparent mode to fit line width and "Link to Bline" to connect regions together.
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Here's three regions almost completely composing the left part of jacket:
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Good luck!